OK I loved it but you did ask for criticism and I love to be helpful! *G*
So long as you do not beget me with child, no This should be either 'so long as you do not get me with child' or 'so long as we do not beget a child'.
Yea…he thinks you took me away from him The word yea was a bit odd there. Did you mean 'yeah'? Because yea, pronounced 'yay' is more... ummm, formal I guess? It sort of fits, because it is a word of agreement, but not really. To me, anyway.
Anyway, finished nitpicking but I LOVED Arthur using his sword when Merlin pushed. Just wanted to mention that that really worked for me, and also I loved Merlin caving and confessing to Morgana. I really wanted that to happen in the episode!
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Date: 2009-10-10 12:28 pm (UTC)So long as you do not beget me with child, no
This should be either 'so long as you do not get me with child' or 'so long as we do not beget a child'.
Yea…he thinks you took me away from him
The word yea was a bit odd there. Did you mean 'yeah'? Because yea, pronounced 'yay' is more... ummm, formal I guess? It sort of fits, because it is a word of agreement, but not really. To me, anyway.
Anyway, finished nitpicking but I LOVED Arthur using his sword when Merlin pushed. Just wanted to mention that that really worked for me, and also I loved Merlin caving and confessing to Morgana. I really wanted that to happen in the episode!